Application letter (2nd draft, with amendments)

ABC Drive Blk 109, #13-123

S’pore 812131

10^th Feb 2011

Mr Samuel

Manager, Human Resource Office

National Environment Agency 40 Scotts Road, #13 - 00

Singapore 228231

Environment Building

Dear Mr. Samuel,

This letter is in response to the advertisement for the post of Environmental Health Executive which appeared on the National Environment Agency’s official website on the 1^st February 2011. I have always wanted to make a contribution to our environment, and sincerely believe that working as an Environmental Health Executive will enable me to help Singapore in sustainable development and providing a quality living environment for present and future generations.

I have just graduated from the National University of Singapore with a merit Degree in Chemistry and minor in Environmental Chemistry. I have a proven track of being a strong leader, a good speaker, and a competent event organizer. Leadership roles I took up include being the Captain for my faculty’s sports team, an Assistant Orientation Group Leader and Head of Publicity for the student’s body, of which details can be seen from the enclosed resume. During my stint as Head of Publicity, I was involved in the organizing of events such as camps, night cycling and the Inter Faculty games for 2009-2011.

In my years of NS, I was a trained medical personnel and instructor in Underwater Medicine, and was tasked with the training of new recruits in it. This allowed me to be able to speak in front of a large group of people, and also to respond quickly and effectively to any queries that were posed to me. The leadership and presentation skills which I possess will put me in good stead in undertaking the responsibilities of an Environmental Health Executive under the National Environmental Agency.

For further details, please refer to the enclosed resume. I hope to hear from you soon to schedule my interview and thank you for your time and kind consideration.

Sincerely,

Jake Gan Hui Wei

Changes made from 1st draft:

1) Address was combined

2) Address under company name is the company’s

3) Advocate for conservation -> I have always wanted to make a contribution to our environment)

4) Job title was highlighted within the letter

5) Grammatical mistakes (are -> were). Possess was not changed to possessed as I currently still have these skills.

6) Inappropriate text were changed. (I will be calling you…. -> I hope to hear from you…)

7) Name changed from just First name to Full name.

Cheers, and waiting for your comments =),

Jake